I wasn't the only commenter who picked up on that. You DID lay it at the feet of women. You might not have meant to, but again, a decent editor would have pointed that out to you and gotten you to clear that up.

"The rise of individualism" has an inference to it that you did not consider, especially in light of youbpreviously laying it all at the feet of women. The inference being that women reclaiming their own agency is just too much individualism for society to bear. Again, EDIT.

Further, it wasn't the rise od individualism in the capitalist system. What the hell does that even mean, contextually? Nothing. It's a linguistic sleight of hand. A phrase meant to make you sound intelligent while not doing anything but dangling about unattached to any sort of critical thought process.

And no, I'm not interested in working for you for free. Editors get paid. Besides, you're clearly more interested in protecting your feelings than becoming a decent writer, which is a shame because mechanically, you've got talent. You're clear and you've got decent flow.

But you're wasting that talent by letting other aspects of being a good writer atrophy in order to churn out content instead of writing a decent piece.

Again, you're not doing feminism any favors cutting corners and being flippant.